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He was not
The hero she wanted

Nor
The champion she desired

He was, however,
The savior she needed

He offered his hand and
She accepted it

She followed him through
Countless battles

Waded through
Rivers of blood

She detested this city
Her cage and prison

She held no love
For it or it's people

But when she finally escaped
She turned to face it once more

She saw the city ablaze and
Towers of corpses rose to the sky

She then wondered
Was her freedom worth it?
Not much to say here, just a random thought I had.
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Edges-to-Everything Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I believe you said a lot here. What a powerful last stanza, a question that is asked - and the answer is most often "No". There are exceptions, are there not? Sometimes sacrifices must be made. But nobody wants to be the sacrificial lamb. Well, a few people are turned into that, with a device strapped to them, a switch ready to hand.

One thing: you wrote "wadded through", but you meant to write "waded through", correct? ~ Cheers! :)
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Infinite-Word-Forge Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I've always believed that one's own happiness should come first, what they want and what they wish to do. However that does not mean they are entitled to it, one must work for one's own happiness. But what if your happiness brings destruction the like of which I speak in this piece? What if your pursuit of happiness is the cause of someone else's suffering? This piece describes how some are blinded by what they want and the suffering they can bring. This is not always the case, of course, but it is something to be aware of.

Yup, that is indeed a mistake on my part. Cheers, man, thanks for the save!
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Edges-to-Everything Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yes. Sadly, this world is indeed full of the suffering of some at the hands of one person in  that pursuit. This really has me thinking about it all, so you've moved me with this poem.
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Infinite-Word-Forge Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm happy to hear that. Thank you for reading, my friend.
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014
Flaws like the river!
It really says sth through a short direct tale!
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Infinite-Word-Forge Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much and thanks for reading and commenting!
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014
Welcome!
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StolenKey Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Nicely written!
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Infinite-Word-Forge Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much and thank for both reading and commenting!
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This-Is-Someone-Else Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
An interesting take on an old paradox. Well done.
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